Let me be
the best part of thee
Not just a mere memory
of days past
fading
till forgotten at last
Let me be
not merely a space
a glance
that time soon would erase
Let me be
not just a line or two
erased
and never remembered by you!
Let me be
nothing more
than this being
whose words
can never be receding
but threading
themselves into lines
worth reading!
For you
Let me be
a simple enchanting mystery
whom you better not reach
though in earnest
you may beseech ;)
Sat: 26-10-1432/ 24-9-2011
4:30 pm
ALL RIghts Reserved @Nisreen (Nisro)
Although this poem is a well developed as you usually do (when it comes to philosophy of writing poetry) yet, it makes me somehow confused as at the beginning of it you requested to be something unique rather than an ordinary person to him
ReplyDeletethe best part of thee
not merely a space
a glance
not just a line or two
Then all of a sudden you lowered your claims to be a simple figure in his life
nothing more
than this being
whose ….
a simple enchanting mystery…
I think this dramatic retreat of what you want to be breaks the consistency of the thoughts.
I appreciate giving an explanation of what I noticed.
Do you really think that the last stanza represents a dramatic change and a sort of lowering of the speaker's goals!?
ReplyDeleteThere is nothing simple or low about an "enchanting mystery"?!
The stanza with its bizarre request is deceivingly simple but in truth it is not- not according to how I see it any way!:)
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A poem can be read and understood in many ways. It can lead to many different interpretations depending on how you look at it.
One way lies in taking "you" in the last stanza of the poem as a key to the lines that follow.
For you
Let me be
a simple enchanting mystery
whom you better not reach
though in earnest
you may beseech ;)
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In other words, the previous stanzas of the poem can be a general request to a reader . The speaker could be a writer striving to make a great impression upon the mind and the soul of his/her reader.
And thus, in truth the writer should be nothing more than "a simple enchanting mystery" whom better not be reached even if s/he (the writer) is sought ;) A writer ought to remain a mystery with no personal bound to his/her reader.
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Thank you for your rich well-thought of comment. I appreciate it.